RE: FLASH: site check (yet another)

[Kevin Jackson]

Didn't bore me to death at all. No apologies needed. I liked it.


A few ideas. Why not dark blue for background (even gradient dark 

blue over darker blue) since you are under the water and for the feel 

of the color. Didn't understand the need for the crosshairs with the 

mushroom cloud to move. (Maybe a mask moving across the cloud to 

indicate the periscope moving was what you were looking for? In Dear 

John you have "hurt your but" instead of "hurt you, but" or "hurt you 

but". Submarine that came in (I think that was what it was) was very 

dark and hard to make out. Perhaps your text could do a slow fade 

going down at an angle? Fits emotionally and metaphorically. Nothing 

major needed.


Just my thoughts,


Kevin Jackson

kjacksontriskelian [dot] com

Would make a decent Blue Nile type tune


On Thursday, May 27, 1999 5:06 PM, Edward Cossette 

[SMTP:

cossettedelmar [dot] edu

] wrote:

> Thanks in advance for taking the time to check out/critique the

> first Flash

> URL I'm sending out to the list (gulp!)

>

> Before you do, though, here are a couple of caveats to keep in mind

> when

> looking it over:

>

> 1.  What I've done is a really simple use of Flash.  No really

> hardcore

> blow-your-doors-off graphics/animation like the kind I've seen from

> others

> on this list.  Not only do I not have the skills to do the really

> advanced

> stuff, even if I did, this is meant to be a very simple thing.

>

> 2.  It's a poem that I've tried to bring to life in Flash, so the

> target

> audience is one far more rooted in "text-based traditions" rather

> than the

> icon/image world inhabited by many of you.  (That is not to say 

that

> it was

> a "dead"  poem on the printed page . . . )  And don't be turned off

> by the

> word "poem."  It's only 2 minutes long and hopefully won't bore

> anyone to

> death.

>

>

> Well, that's enough of me hesitating to get this URL out:

>

> http://www.evolute.org/poetry/submariner/

>

> Thanks,

>

> Edward Cossette

>

>

>

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