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Subject: | Re: FLASH: site check (yet another) |
From: | Debbie Hildreth |
Date: | Fri, 28 May 1999 17:50:57 +0100 |
Edward,
Cool idea to put poetry in flash! Since, my primary background is in English
and in Creative Writing you have given me some inspiration to Flash my own
stuff.
I like the idea and the concept, but I do agree with Jayma about the whistle to
some extent. I did not blast the volume so I did not have the scared me
effect, but it was somewhat jarring. I would say play with the sounds and
think about what you want to stand out on the page -- the effects or the
poetry? I would look to the power of the poetry first and have the sounds be
very background, subtle.
I kind of liked the black background until Nigel suggested the midnight blue
theme. Although I believe that in the depths where subs dwell the water really
isn't colored at all and is more of a black. Any way, I think the Midnight
Blue might also work well.
The one thing that kind of shook me was the choice of the color graphics of the
inside of the sub. I wasn't sure why those were there. I get a real feeling
of isolation from the poem and the color kind of takes that away. Is this what
you have intended?
Villanelle -- Many Kudos for writing in form!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! The villanelle is
a very beautiful and fluid form. You did a good job. I would suggest a little
retooling of your line "way down deep in under the water." The line kind of
sticks when I read through it, perhaps remove the in?
Cool.
Deb
JECJ wrote:
> Nice work Edward,
>
> I think most on this list will agree with me in that sometimes the most
> simple presentations are the most effective. In reading your critique
> request and the notes attached to the poem (yes, I read them) it seems as
> though you have indeed over-thought this.. relax and enjoy your work as
> your work. Just so you know it has inspired me to perhaps put my own poetry
> to Flash, if for nothing else, to see them come alive in a very different
> way, thanks. Now, if I can only find time between these pesky paying
> projects.. hmmmmm
>
> I do however, agree with introducing a bit more blue ;)
>
> Keep going,
>
> -Jim
>
> Champer Interactive
> http://www.champer.com
> webmasterchamper [dot] com
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Edward Cossette [SMTP:cossettedelmar [dot] edu]
> Sent: Thursday, May 27, 1999 5:06 PM
> To: Flasher
> Subject: FLASH: site check (yet another)
>
> Thanks in advance for taking the time to check out/critique the first Flash
> URL I'm sending out to the list (gulp!)
>
> Before you do, though, here are a couple of caveats to keep in mind when
> looking it over:
>
> 1. What I've done is a really simple use of Flash. No really hardcore
> blow-your-doors-off graphics/animation like the kind I've seen from others
> on this list. Not only do I not have the skills to do the really advanced
> stuff, even if I did, this is meant to be a very simple thing.
>
> 2. It's a poem that I've tried to bring to life in Flash, so the target
> audience is one far more rooted in "text-based traditions" rather than the
> icon/image world inhabited by many of you. (That is not to say that it was
> a "dead" poem on the printed page . . . ) And don't be turned off by the
> word "poem." It's only 2 minutes long and hopefully won't bore anyone to
> death.
>
> Well, that's enough of me hesitating to get this URL out:
>
> http://www.evolute.org/poetry/submariner/
>
> Thanks,
>
> Edward Cossette
>
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Debbie Hildreth
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